You'r on the right track...
I was a nice improvement from your last two.
I did like the art in this one, the animation
looks better. I hope you continue to improve
and turn out some more decent submissions.
I usually don't write many reviews, but I was
suprised at the sudden change in the quality of
your work. Your last two submissions were terrible. I don't know what happened, but it was
definitely the way to go. I noticed that you
wrote what seems to be some hostile responses
to some of the more aggressive reviews. With
this sort of improvement, that should become
a thing of the past. Keep improving and good
luck.